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Check Out the Number One Tip for Romance Immersion: Emotional Writing
by JLNicky
Do you write like you own a Tempur-Pedic story and when you bounce the proverbial bowling ball, nothing spills? Wrong. That standing glass of wine is holding the emotional heartbeat of your story. Every author should know each time the ball bounces, the wine should spill, or else the ball was unnecessary.
Does this theme sound familiar? Writers use similar analogies for plotting. How many times have you heard the saying if what you are writing doesn’t add to the plot and move it forward, leave it out? But emotional writing is different. It has to be there. Readers want to immerse themselves in the story. Story immersion is when the reader cries at the sad parts and laughs out loud at the funny. You, as the writer, are trying to reach immersion with the reader through your character’s emotions? Of course, when I say character, it can be an actual character, a weather phenomenon, a symbol, or more.
For an example of other than a character, think about a wedding ring, or a favorite song, or a storm that represents hostility.
But back to characters. Your character’s emotions should seep, leak, spill, burst, and scream out of the words you use. Or your proverbial bowling ball… is falling flat and you’ve missed a writing opportunity.
How do we clarify what aids the plot versus what is just put in to cover word count? The events happening inside the story are the plot. Let’s look at some popular known plots and some fantastic Lesbian romance plots for examples:
- Harry Potter is a boy who learns on his eleventh birthday that he is the orphaned son of two powerful wizards and possesses unique magical powers of his own.
- An obsessive quest of Ahab, captain of the whaling ship Pequod, he hunts for revenge on Moby Dick, the giant white sperm whale that on the ship’s previous voyage bit off Ahab’s leg at the knee.
- Romeo Montague falls instantly in love with Juliet Capulet but cannot have her because of an age-old vendetta between the two families.
And in the Lesbian Romance arena we have:
- Compass Rose by Anna Burke is a pirate’s tale but oh so much more. Miranda, captain of the Man O’ War and Compass Rose, is a woman born with the ability to identify cardinal points, romance the futuristic seas of the dystopian future of 2513.
- Her Countess to Cherish by Jane Walsh, a historical romance featuring a female/non-binary romance between Miss Beatrice Everson and Mr. George Smith. Beatrice doesn’t know that George is the alter ego of Lady Georgina Smith, host of a bluestocking salon. And Georgina has to let Beatrice know all her secrets to spend the rest of their love together.
Effective aids to plotting can be layered into the writing as foreshadowing, red herrings, cause and effect, conflict, subplots, character development, themes, etc. But the most important plot technique is emotional writing. Connecting with the reader. Reaching out with the words and touching the reader’s heart. What? Emotional writing, you say? YES. These authors purposely write through the characters’ emotions to reach the reader. It’s hard, ya’ll. The words used, the tone, the pace, these are things that affect emotional writing. But once you do it right, the book is talked about for years.
When the reader is immersed in the story. They remember your book. They bring it up in a conversation about how they cried or laughed so hard. The reader remembers the emotions that were evoked. For example, look at the emotional spillage of a few popular stories and some lesbian romance:·
- In The Color Purple by Alice Walker, the reunion of Celie and Nettie as older women who run toward each other as Celie calls out her sister’s name has the reader bawling in between claps and satisfied yes’.
- The uncontrollable emotions (love, hate, wrath, infatuation, and outrage), that race through Romeo and Juliet, have a direct impact on the tragic events that unfold. Romeo compares Juliet to the sun when he first sees her on the balcony. “It is the east, and Juliet is the sun”.·
- Edmund, the main character in The Count of Monte Cristo, in his quest for revenge which has been eating at most of his emotional life, finds out his youth lover was stolen from him by Mendego. Then later he finds out the reason Mercedes married Fernand a month after Edmond went to prison, was because she wanted to hide her pregnancy with Edmond’s child, Albert. Edmund is a father. This was his and the reader’s ah-ha moment of pure deliverance.
- Finding Jessica Lambert by Clare Ashton is an epic stranger to lovers’ lesbian romance that is so touching and fulfilling to the reader. The writer uses the inner turmoil and the conflicting emotions of the main characters Anna and Jessica to immerse the reader into the experience, building to a climatically perfect Happily Ever After.
- I think I’ve blogged about this one before but Waking The Dreamer by K. Aten is a gorgeous immersion into a science fiction world that the reader is swept into in this futuristic story. The relationships, boundaries, and isolation of the dystopian world affect the two main characters Julia and Niko in so many wonderful and awful ways. This is a deep thinker story more than a romance but go find that out yourself.
- Jericho by Ann McMan is a complete romance story that develops between Librarian Syd Murphy and Dr. Maddie Stevenson. Their relationship is beautifully built by the author and has a captivating comical country style that is breathless in the small-town life and characters of the Appalachian Mountains of Virginia. Don’t miss this one.
So, why use emotions at all? If the story rouses the reader with action, science fiction, or sex, why include one more layer of emotion? Great question. The emotional moments can tell the reader the plot is thickening. Like the subtext in Read Between the Lines: A Novel (Ms. Right Book 1) by Rachel Lacey between the flirty online friendship struck up by Rosie Taft and Jane Breslin
Or if one character needs the other to feel safe or secure and sparks fly, while the plot thickens, such as Vagabond by Natalie Debrabandere when lawyer JoAnn Daniels is being assaulted and Morgan Lee interrupts to save the day.
Or perhaps the characters are being tested? Cultural or traveling adventures, moving across lands or bending rules, I Can’t Think Straight by Shamim Sarif is a perfect example, testing emotions between spirited Christian Tala and shy Muslim Leyla as one has an awakening, and the other is forced to cross-cultural boundaries.
Your characters’ highs can become instant lows, the wellspring of happiness can overflow, that ah-ha moment can thread all the pieces into a glorious quilt of understanding. And sometimes the ball bounces and you find your character sobbing tears of heartache and frustration. Isn’t this pattern how it is in real life?
But is it necessary?
Yes, it’s necessary. As a writer, take your character to the places they don’t want to go but need to be, to show the reader how they become who they are. You must build a romance layer by layer and prove to the reader those characters should and deserve to fall in love. A common technique is the action/reaction feedback loop. The action taken causes a reaction to feedback. This way, the two characters learn more about each other.
- Just One Night (Castleton Hearts, #1) by Chelsea M. Cameron builds in intensity as main character Paige romances Esme for all the wrong reasons but in all the right ways.·
- The Missus by Natasha West. The main character Keira Evans invites her neighbor Alanna Hall to pretend to be her GF to stem the tide of ridiculous women who fall in love after a one-night stand. Alanna finds herself in a homeless pickle and thinks bunking with Keira might work out for her for a while. Starting with rocky intentions, the two women use each other for separate personal reasons, but then the sham starts to feel real.
- The Next Life by Lise Gold and Madeleine Taylor is a lengthy read of a surprisingly tender and steamy buildup between Reina Amari, a newly divorced wealthy mother of two, and Belle Rodgers, the pool technician, a single mom, and a Hamptons’ Escort. The two women flow through a tremendous range of emotions as they deal with different lifestyles, undeniable chemistry, and an awakening. There is a lot going on in this book, but it’s done so well.
Make your characters wallow deeper in thoughts of grief, impatience, annoyance, satisfaction, pleasure. Each emotion is a personal layer of the character’s true self. And sometimes these emotions can untangle even the hardest truths, to lay bare the romance that is caught in a maelstrom of confusion. Spill the wine and stain the bed with spilled emotions. Trust me, it’s worth every drop to the invested reader. Bring on the romance and the emotional writing. Let the reader feel the rollercoaster ride of romantic fervor and lust. Treat us to the inescapable happily ever after (HEA) so we too can swoon with love and laughter. Make sure to thank the writer if they tap into that lovely place for you, the reader.
Here is a quick intense moment from my online novel Homeless
Inside the confines of her car, the nightmare of her life continued, as Jesse Papakos, once again, created a sleeping nest with a blanket over her tall form. She had few choices. She shivered even as she reached over to shut off the heat and save what little gas remained. For the last three weeks, with only a few dollars left in her pocket and the chilled weather yet bearable, the Lexus had become her shelter, her bedroom, and a storage unit for what little possessions she elected to grab before the bank evicted her from her condo. The car, her almost vintage Lexus, was the last remaining item of any value she’d kept from her previous life as the executive senior level contracts negotiator for Titius United Bank. A career she once thought synonymous with job security, now almost a year has gone.
Trying not to think about tomorrow’s continued dead-end job search in a city that held 100,000 other laid-off job seekers, the whole process seemed like a never-ending sinkhole—one step forward then a steep slide down—and the frightening depths she was forced to yield to was still overshadowed by the immediate grumbling complaints of her stomach. She ignored the hollow echoes and curled down into her hideaway, exhausted.
Her thoughts churned with her rising depression. All-day long, she fought to be noticed and plucked out of the job mob, hoping for the miracle of being hired. In a normal world, she wasn’t asking for much. She had skills and education. She had a proven work track record. But since the market collapse, the world was unbalanced, teetering on weak shoulders. Jobs were not only scarce but if offered, they were paid at such pitiful rates, they should be volunteer status. Chaos, the dirty bastard, reveled in his ability to wreak havoc on lives across the country. Companies were not hiring. For the last five months, she’d spent her daylight hours desperately following up on leads, only to be told the positions were no longer available. Now ten months after the crash, no job, no 401K, no condo, she could no longer finance staying in a motel. Her savings, whittled down to less than fifty dollars in cash, remained hidden in her pocket lining. This week’s gas would eat that up. The outlook was grim. She should probably start looking to sell her car, but the fear and danger of being truly homeless made her hesitate. Her car was the only thing keeping her from the limitation of immobility.
Moonlight fought the darkness, and the cocooned woman stared out at the nice little tree-lined street with houses and lights and porch swings. She wrestled with her misery as she swallowed back tears.
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JLNicky, LGBT Romance Author